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範文為什麼拿高分：逐句解析

• I believe students should be allowed to use cell phones at school, but only with clear rules.
  第一句就表明立場，閱卷老師一眼看到你的看法。
• First, phones are useful learning tools.
  First 開啟第一個理由，段落有結構。
• Students can look up new words, check information for projects, and use learning apps in class.
  用三個具體例子支持理由，而不是空泛地說『很方便』。
• Second, phones help students stay safe.
  Second 帶出第二個理由。
• If a student feels sick or misses the bus, he or she can contact parents right away.
  if 條件句給出情境，內容更有說服力。
• However, phones can also be a problem.
  However 呈現另一面的看法，顯示思考完整。
• Some students play games or chat online instead of listening to the teacher.
  instead of＋V-ing 的正確用法。
• Therefore, schools should let students use phones only during breaks or when teachers ask them to.
  Therefore 提出解決方法，呼應開頭的『有規則』。
• In my opinion, with good rules, cell phones can help students more than they hurt them.
  結論句再次回到立場，首尾呼應。

常見錯誤

• 只寫立場、沒有理由或例子。
• 每句都用 I think 開頭，句型單調。
• 字數明顯不足 120 字。
• 把 advice / information 加 s。

交卷前自我檢查

• 第一句清楚表明立場？
• 至少兩個理由，每個理由有例子？
• 有用 First / Second / However / Therefore 連接？
• 結論句回應立場？
• 約 120 字？